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tjguitarz

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Hey everyone,

I'm writing a book and I've just started a blog so that I can get input from people other than my parents and friends.

PLEASE take a look. Leave comments. I could use all the help (and prayers!) that I can get.

http://malvitas.blogspot.com/

TJ

P.S. If you have any suggestions to make my blog more readable/comprehensive, let me know.
 
I read the prologue. I'll give the chapter a look when I have more time. There were a couple of spelling/grammar errors but the story seems pretty good.
 
YES! Thank you for giving me feedback.

Feel free to point out any spelling or grammer mistakes for me.

Chapter 1 rocks. It's my favorite next to 6, 8, 13, and 14. :-D
 
I see 31 people have checked out this forum. Have any of you visited my blog? If so, please speak up! :-D

Thanks, TJ
 
You spelled (governer) wrong. It's actually spelled (governor). The word (it's) means (it is). The way you are using it should just be (its). I hope this helps. There may be other errors such as placement of commas or using a semicolon instead of a comma but sometimes those can be arbitrary. Don't worry about it too much. Most writers aren't necessarily good spellers or use grammar correctly. That's why their books go through an editing process before they get published. Finish the book and worry about that stuff later.
 
I've read the prolouge and the 1st chapter. At this point you are doing a very good job of leading the reader on so that they want more. That's great at keeping the reader intersted. Lots of unanswered questions that the reader will feel the need to have resolution too. Maybe more description of the scenery. You may have already included that further on, but at least the parts I was reading, the landscape seemed to be a little ambiguous. I like to be able to follow the geography of the story. Good Luck! and Good job!
 
Hey guys,

Thanks a TON for your replies. It's encouraging to see.

Astrod00d, you're right. I'm not very good with, grammer! or speeleng. I've also noticed that I use a lot of commas too. But, I guess I write how I say it in my head. Thanks for the heads up, I'll change that later. I hope my editor (if it ever gets that far) doesn't hate me. :-D

Notashamed, thanks for your comments. They're very encouraging. Good idea about the scenery. I realized that I had it all pictured in my head but I never really described much.

Thanks for everything guys. I hope to see more replies from you (and more people) in the future. Feel free to post comments on my blog as well.

Thanks, Tyler
 
I need to write some stuff, I have great ideas, but I focus in mainly from a engineering side...so it gets interesting trying to convey an idea without confusing everyone...
 
vibrokatana said:
I need to write some stuff, I have great ideas, but I focus in mainly from a engineering side...so it gets interesting trying to convey an idea without confusing everyone...
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i have the same problem... i over-explain things in my book (yes i have one too, and it is fantasy)


WORD OF ADVICE FOR TJ: i strongly recommend you get word perfect, it is the most awesome program ever for books. right now (unfortunately, due to a miscommunication) i have microsoft word (grr.) instead of word perfect, so it's hard to type up the book.
but in any case, both programs have a spelling and grammar check, which can really phenominally help you and speed up your work. also, it's easier to keep track of how large the book is, since you have page numbers =D
keep up the good work, your vocabulary is wonderfully designed for fantasy books!
 
the only problem with both WordPerfect and MS Word, is the fact that they cost money. A good solution to that issue is OpenOffice, which does everything those two do, and its free.
 
Hey vibrokatana, I'm with you. I'm an engineer (actually working for GM right now!), although I'd prefer to spend my life writing.

I have a tentency to make things a little confusing too. But the idea is to just write. It'll probably suck at first (as happened to me) but then as you edit and re-edit, you see the things that make it suck and your writing style changes for the better. :D

Kidan, you could also post it on a blog. I originally typed mine in MSWord but from what I've seen on blogger, you can save posts as drafts and then submit them when you want to.
 
While we are on the subject of grammatical errors, I should mention that the title of this thread shouldn't have an apostrophe in it.
 
you can use the aspell libraries to correct existing work, workes great and is used by most of the open source spell checkers.
 
I've skimmed through chapter 4, I might suggest a better transition at the end of chapter 3 and the beginning at chapter 4. I might also suggest that Chapter 4 be in 1st person instead of third. Your characters are asking Rachel to tell the story, then you tell it instead of her. It'll help the readers connect better emotionally if they feel that they are a part of Rachels story (which they will if it's 1st person) The story is really good at prepelling itself. :)
 
wierd to shift... not really. like notashamed said, they ask her to tell it, so if you put in immediately into first it sounds like she's telling it.

i just thought of this (dur unto me): use quotations at the beginning of every paragraph where she explains. then it becomes not a wierd shift but actually a quotation of her speaking, which makes twice the sense!
 
yeah what amicus said. :)

It's her story and she's telling it. You are not really switching from 3rd to 1st in your style, your just letting your character tell her part of the story.
 
Alright I'll give it a shot. I plan on going back and editing some of my older chapters.

Speaking of which, has anyone read all of 1-5? I can put up more if you're interested... 9 more chapters easily.
 
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